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Heh thanks.
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Adamsm
New story up.
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Adamsm
Eh, had some free time last night, so figured I'd work on the story I've had in my head for a while.
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Monday
It was indeed pretty good.
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Adamsm
Lol, I doubt that.
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Adamsm
Yes I know
, two stories in one week? What is going on. Anyways, enjoy.
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Adamsm
Heh, thanks Hyper.
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Adamsm
Heh, thanks Flying; yeah I tried to make it realistic. The other chapters for Tova's story will build on that.
By the way, one more thing, did you stop rp'ing on the board?Just haven't felt like RP'ing is all; probably will end up coming back at some point.
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Adamsm
Did some editing; the Prologue and Chapter 1 are in the same box now.
Also, working on Chapter 2 now.
Edit: Crap......just realized I overlooked a major time line event with my choice of Tova's age.....
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Adamsm
Chapter 2
(possibly first part) is finished.
Edit: Piece of writer's commentary: yes I know I am one of the biggest defenders of the Night Elf xenobigotry, and the idea that a few dozen years here and there would not wipe it out. Two main things: Runetree has never felt this way, and since joining up with the Druids shortly after the War of the Ancients, he was one of the ones who learned at the sides of the other races, and is an unofficial ambassador type. Second thing, while Tova shows some fear, remember that eventually he ends up the patriarch of a family of Night Elf/Darkspear troll hybrids; no xenophobia in him and now that you all have had a chance to meet up with his mentor/teacher, you can understand why.
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Adamsm
Part 2 of Chapter 2 is finished.
Writers Commentary about it:
Yes, I wanted to make the choice actually mean something, something different from what we see in game, where it's merely a simple quest. I've always felt that the Sons, Daughters, Keepers and the Great Spirits would not actually speak physically, and decided to try something new. I also figured that those who travel into the Dream in Spirit wouldn't actually need to speak either; good choice or bad?
Over all, I liked the 2nd Chapter; took a while, but figured it was worth it.
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Adamsm
Hey, new tale.
So, with Kali withdrawn from Aftermath, time to expand on that. As the name says, it's going to lead up to her actual final death, with her remembering important moments before her final death. Let me know what you think.
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Monday
I tried to read that one, I really did, but there were two things that threw me off:
"Blah." Said So-an-so should be -----> "Blah," said So-and-so.
The other is that you aren't spacing your dialogue. There should be a new line each time the person speaking changes.
If you could edit that, that'd be fantastic. Because, from what I read, it seemed interesting and well written, but those two things threw me (and I'm sure a few other people too) off.
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Adamsm
Spaced some of it....but now it looks far worse....
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Monday
Much easier to read though.
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Monday
So, overall it was enjoyable. There seemed to be a little bit of verb usage that seemed a little strange, but it flowed fairly well.
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