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[Story]: The Revenge
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I want to read it, but I'm going to bed and then when I wake up i have to leave in the morning for the whole weekend, so I'll get back to you when I get home again.
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Patty
Yes, just read it all now. Pretty original. :)
But, when is this supposed to take place may I ask?
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Patty
I meant Pre/Post Third War, Pre-WoW, during WoW etc. :)
Because, I would assume it is during the Third War with the Demons, but Teldrassil hadn't been made then.
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Skreeran
Haven't read it yet, but just a quick note, Night Elves don't reach adulthood until around age 300 (minimum 110).
You may want to edit, or you can leave it as is, it's only a minor detail... :P
If I have the time, perhaps I'll write a review, I think I'd like to try that, perhaps make reviewing a regular thing... :P
Edit: I went ahead and wrote a quick write-up of Chapter one.
The Attack - Chapter One of The Revenge
There's not much to say at the start. It's a short chapter, but necessarily so, it would seem. We do not know very much about the protagonist, Nathos, yet, other than that he appears to be rather distant and unhappy.
The spelling and grammatical errors, while few, can throw off the eye, at one point it took me a minute to figure out who was speaking, due to a misplaced quotation mark.
The writing style is decent, although the narrative tone could perhaps be made more appropriate for the subject, and less colloquial. It's almost as if Nathos is an eighteen year old human from the twentieth century. While it certainly wouldn't need to be written in old english, the racial setting should at least be taken into consideration.
Overall, it is a good introduction, and I look forward to getting a better view into the story.
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